Wed, February 24, 2021 in Issue 21: Protectors and Serve

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shastab24 Wed, February 24, 2021 edit delete
shastab24
Colaptes (check out his comic Drunk Tank) did better at showing Mari and Michelle being affectionate than I have, and I need to take a cue from this and start showing how close they are. Same with Karl and Michael. Let couples be couples, really.

Also, in the last panel: of course this wasn't going to be an uneventful get-together at home. Now, I did add those two sentences Pinball makes admonishing hirself. Zhe's not supposed to be a quipper for the most part. However, Colaptes remains a comedic writer, so I don't blame him for wanting to put some levity into the dialogue there, to offset seeing one of the main characters so hurt.

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DT_Colaptes Thu, July 22, 2021 edit delete reply
DT_Colaptes
Great additions! Makes Pinball's dialogue not quite as detached as it unintentionally came out as.

And thank you! As they say, write what you know! oh who am I kidding?