Wed, February 24, 2021 in Issue 21: Protectors and Serve

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shastab24 Wed, February 24, 2021 edit delete
Colaptes (check out his comic Drunk Tank) did better at showing Mari and Michelle being affectionate than I have, and I need to take a cue from this and start showing how close they are. Same with Karl and Michael. Let couples be couples, really.

Also, in the last panel: of course this wasn't going to be an uneventful get-together at home. Now, I did add those two sentences Pinball makes admonishing hirself. Zhe's not supposed to be a quipper for the most part. However, Colaptes remains a comedic writer, so I don't blame him for wanting to put some levity into the dialogue there, to offset seeing one of the main characters so hurt.


DT_Colaptes Thu, July 22, 2021 edit delete reply
Great additions! Makes Pinball's dialogue not quite as detached as it unintentionally came out as.

And thank you! As they say, write what you know! oh who am I kidding?